Vampire Bliss

• Artist: CosmicEnby
• Description: one of my good poems.
• Date: 10/04/2008
• Tags: vampire bliss

Come sink thine fangs into mine neck,
The sight of the moon hast put me in a reck,
The sound of thine's breathing hast caused me to stutter,
For I feel mine heart dancing and my lids start to flutter.
I feel the pain and cry out with joy,
For thine spell hast turned me so coy,
Mine eyes open wide for I feel my fangs growing,
Thine venom of love has kept mine madness from showing.
I am now like you come close to me here,
For thou lookst so scrumptious, shalt I call you near?

-inola de'barderac heart

Comments

[bluecrystals08]

I rly enjoyed this poem. I liked how you portrayed the emotions and changing into a vampire. It reminds me of Twilight or some part of the movie Queen of the Damned.
Nice job smile

[Scheria Nile]

lolz..twilight...

[CosmicEnby]

actually, funny enough, i started reading twilight recently...finished it too. i wrote this way before twilight...i don't mind checking your poems either. the key for catchy poetry is; rhyme, not more than 11 words per line, no less than 5-6, find a common and attractive topic, and if need help rhyming use "rhymer.com" or search rhyming dictionaries through google. i never use them because i already have the poem created in my mind. Thanks for the comments!

[Arisada-sama]

LAWL

[samantha38]

vampires rule

[janek p swiatek]

im gessing you like twilight

[liquidrone]

how do i write my own poem?