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This heart
it may be torn, weathered, and worn
broken and bleeding,
not always capable of seeing,
but, it's mine to give
These hands
they're unsteady and rough,
not always strong enough
And they tend to give in
to fit the mold
even so, they are mind to hold
These eyes,
they're dark
and have shed many tears,
and have witnessed my greatest fears
They do not shine like diamonds bright,
but still, these eyes are mine
And if you don't mind my tattered soul
and gracing my lonesome door
This girl
all of me
can be yours
- by xHasuRebornx |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 09/06/2008 |
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- Title: All of Me
- Artist: xHasuRebornx
- Description: i was lonely ha ha .. having an emo moment of sorts i suppose
- Date: 09/06/2008
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Comments (3 Comments)
- booooooooobs - 02/09/2009
- I REALLY LIKE IT biggrin 5 outta 5
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- that kids a whore - 09/06/2008
- whoa that wuz really good XD great job
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- Farrelei - 09/06/2008
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It was okay, I guess, but the last paragraph kind of ruined the way the poem was going. Last paragraphs can be tough sometimes.
Something about this poem just needs work... I dunno.
3/5, good luck. - Report As Spam