Poor Little Girl

• Artist: Rivii
• Description: I wrote this about 6 months ago. I have put in on Deviantart, but I have a disclaimer on the discription there saying I am using it here to prove I have written it.
• Date: 08/10/2008
• Tags: poorgirl

Poor little girl
running away from life
away from its evil
torture and strife

Poor little girl
you’ve been beaten and bruised
and they all watched
and seemed amused

You run to the cliff
with the lake down below
and felt the wind
blow to and fro

You reached the tip
and gazed beyond
breaking away
from the chains that bond

Poor little girl
your broken inside
from all that have hurt you
from all that have lied

You think one last time
before letting go
no one is around
but soon they will know

You felt a tear drop
and from the cliff you sprung
poor little girl
you were so young

Comments

[serena emilia]

wow. i cannot believe i just saw this one for the first time. it should be under the link to Top Rated Poetry and Lyrics. that is simply amazing. you so get a 5/5. if i were you i might have rearranged the last four lines because it leaves you feeling like there's more. just the arrangement of the words, not the meaning. not nagging - i just think it's amazing. wink

[Magic Diamond Angel]

Really good one. ^_^ I gave you 5/5 for language but the reason... 3/5 → My decision 5/5 Make the best one !!! :]