be myself

• Artist: mamaafrica101
• Description: just read it and tell me what you think of it.
• Date: 07/27/2008
• Tags: bemyself

When i'm by myself
and close my eyes
i'm a twin
i am a dimple in a chin
i'm a room full of toys
i'm a squeaky noise
i'm a gospel song
i'm a gong
i'm a leaf turning red
i'm a whatever i want to be
and when i open my eyes
what i care to be is me

Comments

[vv7722]

I think you could do a better job on writing it, but the message is very powerful and touching. Thank you for sharing that.

[Savior_ofunsafespirits]

The middle doesn't really match up in syllables, but the end is great!

[One Dandy Fop]

watch the syllable counts, it feels like it could use some meter.