Fade Away

• Artist: Xvalentine_vampireX
• Description: I wrote this after a break up. It was heart wrenching to loose him. So here is my poetry about it.
• Date: 07/16/2008
• Tags: love

You used to see me everyday,
And all the things you used to say,
Made me feel better when I was sad,
They used to make me glad,
I thought you loved me like you said,
I thought the misery was dead,
You made me safe with no fears,
But then you brought me into tears,
She took my place in your eyes,
And you never heard my cries,
I felt like i disapeared,
It was something i feared,
In the silence i now wait,
To fade away is my fate.

Comments

[Xx_BunnyAlice_xX]

Good poem! I like it sad, my kind of poems are sad... keep writing, put more emotion into it

[BlondePsycho]

Not as weepy as I thought it would be when I heard it was a break up poem and it flows nicely.

[Luna Deslumbrado]

AWWWW SAD! CUTE! I LOVE IT!

[selene_queen_of_a_lost]

wow i know that pain all too well....i understand trust me i do....i do an hey the flow is a tad off but for the most part it works try reading my sLiP oUt ThE baCk u might like it

[Schizophrenic Angel]

It's a pretty good poem, I would have liked to a little more use of vocabulary and the flow was off in some places. Here's a hint, try to make it so when you read it to something like a beat, it seems smooth and works. That's they key to good flow <33

[whatwhat47]

its good chek out my poem calld evils of hate