i dont feel it

• Artist: xXxKiss_Me_GoodbyexXx
• Description: i've been feeling so numb lately, my memories practically nothing more than a minuet for every week
• Date: 11/23/2008
• Tags: dont feel

Hurt me,
beat me,
abuse me,
I don't feel it

Love me,
treasure me,
help me'
I don't hear it

Toss me around,
leave me,
kill me,
I don't care

Lately there is nothing to hold on to
lately nothing seems worth the struggle
lately you've been trying,
an example of a wasted effort

Lately you've given up
lately I've let you
lately I've been alone
a trampled effort of normality

Comments

[DoomsdayDevices]

o.o
it's a good poem ^^
Just, so you get better comments, maybe grammar would help ^^'
Good writing biggrin

[End~Moraine]

Again, find me something that isn't border-line emo and cliche, and I'll give you applause.

[Hatori Amos]

Spelling. Grammar. Punctuation. Fix those things, and then maybe I will take your entry seriously.

[jenuinely]

uhhhhhh O.e ish very wierd

[starmidnightblue]

ok for the people who keep talking about punctuation, you don't need it for poetry. i used to write a lot when i was going through a bad time in my life and when your feeling so lonely and depressed you just don't really care about how its written. so just stop sayin crap about work and polishing because they can express themselves however they want!

[Klaora]

As with practically every other entry in this category, please learn to spell, capitalize the word 'I' as well as the first letter of the first word of every line. Add punctuation marks, especially commas, periods, and apostrophes. Overall, it's all right, but it needs a LOT of work and polishing. Good luck.

[Maryjustianna]

woooooooooow it deserves a five!