Torrent

• Artist: ArchangelTsuya
• Description: I don't usually write poetry, especially not a love poem.. but I thought I might give it a shot, my rhyming. I don't even know what to call it or what the rhyming scheme is lol.. I just wrote it from the heart.
• Date: 11/02/2008
• Tags: torrent

When you came to me,
I couldn't even see,
What was going to happen,
In the torrent of my heart..

I stood and tried to see,
As you pried my soul free,
From its earthly bearing,
And examined it part by part..

What were you to be,
Just another girl to me?
I just could not breathe,
Suffocated.. by the torrent of my heart...

Comments

[gaara_forever6814]

Its good. Lots of feeling. 4 stars.

[FallingXgnillaF]

It works smile

[Tea Room Terror]

Really good poem Pelly! 5 stars. :]

[ArchangelTsuya]

Lol thanks anyhow o3o

[Lieutenant Furball]

I think it's good. Not a huge poetry fan, so I wouldn't know anyway.

[Cheating Time]

I like it. It's a thousand times better than half the entries I see on here.