Singing to Myself

• Artist: Sahri-hime
• Description: I happen to be afraid of the dark, and afraid of not waking up. When I'm afraid, I'm also delusional. So I wrote this one night to try and reassure myself. A few friends liked it, and I hope you will too.
• Date: 07/17/2008
• Tags: sparrowsnightmaredawnnightwings

Even flightless sparrows sing
With worry perched on broken wings
Morning comes, and with it brings
Angels' tears and golden strings

I don't believe in fear, awake
But after stars begin to break
Sleep won't come until dawn's wake
Shatters screams the night makes

I'm only simple, this I swear
Brown eyes and auburn hair
Nothing strange, always there
And yet the fear begins to wear

But flightless sparrows have to sing
To keep from breaking both their wings

Copyrighted to me. Get over it.

Comments

[reacheal]

i love it!! it inspires me so much, the line "to keep from breaking both their wings" was especially powerful. keep up the good work, i look forward to reading more of it ^_^

[TAtsUjiRi]

Did it take awhile to think of this poem? It's very very good

[Nihilistic Seraph]

Very nice, you kept to the rhyme scheme without it seeming forced. The line "Sleep won't come until dawn's wake" feels a little awkward, mainly because you have the previous line in a nice iambic rhythm, but then break away from that.

If you could, I'd say make it a little longer too, you could make it more intense, or go into more detail.

[Sahri-hime]

Oh, wow... I didn't expect to get comments and such on the first day!

Thanks for the ratings, and thanks for the opinions. I hope to make better (and more clearly written) poetry in the future.

[X_star lover_X]

i love it <3 5/5

[vampiress45]

original I love it 5/5

[KB24-LBJ23]

awesome!!!