Tears you don't understand

• Artist: emo skater__gurl2114
• Description: comment or don't comment's
  would help me if you do though.
  to see what ppl think.
  this about a girl loseing the Love of
  because he died and her losing the one
  that love's her
  
• Date: 02/13/2010
• Tags: tears dont understand

i lost the Love of my life Tyler
it left me with a broken heart that i can't mend
i try and try
but no one can make me whole...

i've moved on and i'm in "love" with someone named Ben
but it doesn't feel right
it's like i have to force it
i cry and he doesn't know why
but i do...

i don't Ben i want Tyler but i can't get him back
so as i run away in the pouring rain
i cry
and scream his name under my breath
i look at the Sky and think of him....

i flash back to the time we were in the park
and everything was perfect
the birds singing kissing you on the swing set...

as i rember that a car is speeding in front of me
i see it coming but i still stand in the road
it hit's me
and as i fade away i smile and say
"I Love You Tyler i'll see you soon"

Ben starts to cry and says i never did understand
why she cried
but i do now

Comments

[Lorem Corpus]

Missing a lot of grammar... A bit cliched, I've seen a lot of this used before. There's definitely potential in your writing style, but maybe try submitting something more original?

[Mrs_Smiley12345]

this is so creative with the love in her heart how she loves her past bf and now how she forces her bf Ben on her heart empty heart filled with no love of his only for tyler

[xX Lil SnowBell Xx]

Awww thats so sweet, I love it smile . Kinda reminded me of me wink ... Such a good job, keep it up