bedknobs and pentegrams part 1

• Artist: malintkang
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• Date: 09/18/2010
• Tags: bedknobs pentegrams part

jennifer and josh were invited to genas party but the only reson they were really invited was because her mom wanted her to invite everybody in her class , jennifer ran to the backyard where nobody was ,and then she began to cry. josh finally found jennifer . " what is wrong ", said josh. " everybody hates me , and i want to kill myself ", . but little did jennifer know that it was the beginning of a new life. " look at the moon " , said josh . the two of them looked up it was a glowing blue color it shined down on their eyes it changed their eye color to the glowing blue color . then everything went black. the next morning it felt like nothing happend but something was going on. when josh raised his hand at school the chalkboard blew up,and when jennifer got mad at a girl her backpack caught on fire ,something was happening,something was beginning it felt like magic. to be continued.......

Comments

[Gizensha Sakugo]

You need to work on your grammar. It is a good idea, but because you didn't spend much effort making it look pretty, its hard to read and seems amateurish, when I can bet you can do better. smile You also might want to spend a little more time on things, it seems a bit rushed. I like the part about the blue moon, though.