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"no!!!" he shouted and lunged for her feet. but it was to late, jillain johnson quickly plunged down into the deep, dark abyss. There was nothing he could do now, cory stood up off the cold hard ground and brushed off his dirty hands. his beloved sister was gone, all becuase of that boy, cory could remember him well, the one that conviced her that life was worth nothing, and jumping into the abyss known as rocky gulch was the only solution.
cory had known the boy welll, often he was over for family dinners, and even went on a trip to the olympic mountains with them. but a about a year after they met,the boys mother died and thats when he bagan to tell jillian that life was worthless. and unfourtunatly for cory, she beleived him.
about a month after chster (that was the boys name) began acting strange so did corys sister. they would often stay out late at night and come back in the early morings with their clothes torn, and smelling like fights and blood.
but it really took a turn for the worst when jillian started doing dangorus things, like clif jumping and having the urge to do things that no one else would ever think of attemping.
cory though about thisas he stood there watching his sister wordlesly plunge to her death. it was to late, he knew that, there was nothing he could do but recover from this masturous shock adn just try to live a normal,normal life.
- Title: the jump
- Artist: meowmix81
- Description: a boys sister jumps off a cliff
- Date: 10/09/2009
- Tags: jump cliff sadness
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Comments (2 Comments)
- meowmix81 - 10/10/2009
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hi
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- AwesomePossomGirl - 10/09/2009
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I like it.
But in the Arena, I'm a serious perfectionest, who like to help people out, so here's what I'm gonna say:
Good, spelling needs a little work, And remember those capitals okay? Plus, You shouldn't put "a month after chster (that was the boys name)" You should introduce him earlier, and try not to us paranteses if you're not talking in a first person story. I like how you said, "he stood there watching his sister wordlesly plunge to her death" I thought that that was very interesting. - Report As Spam