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You see this is my Story
Wait!!!Wait!!! Anastashia!!! What do you want this time Tabatha? I asked. It's real!!! im telling you its real!! i just went by the old mill on the other side of town and its real!!!Whats real? I asked surprised by her urgency.The FESTIVAL it's real!!! You know the one where all the gypsies, Thieves, and pickpockets go to. Come on Anastashia!!! She pleaded we must go before King Thomas and his men find the place!!!
Fine I replied, Good then lets go!!! And with a simple jump off the carriage the were speeding away to the old Whenchester Mill
See!!! Tabatha replied its the festival! Anastashia could not believe her eyes before her stood a magnificent celebration, there were Gypsie dancers, Palm readers, Circus performers, and of course a freak show... Tabatha grabbed me and pulled into the freak show tent not knowing what horrors awaited us there.To be continued...
- by KatiaynaTheCrazy |
- Fiction
- | Submitted on 08/28/2009 |
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- Title: My story so far
- Artist: KatiaynaTheCrazy
- Description: Before you get any ideas i suggest you do not read this if you are not a powerfull critic
- Date: 08/28/2009
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Comments (2 Comments)
- Rosalie Mason - 12/14/2009
- Well, I don't see any punctuation to represent any dialogue so I am a bit confused. And I think you can go for some stronger words. Look for some sinonyms for the simple words, it gets you far.
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- KatiaynaTheCrazy - 08/28/2009
- Sorry that its so short i got tired and bored so i accidently erased a whole middle section of my story Yikes!!
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