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I always have time's where I'm feeling so
cold. So lonely in my dark quiet room.
No one cares about me. Not really.
If I just ended my life..No one would
show up for my funeral. I always think
about ending my life, but when I try,
He shows up. My, Angel. To stop me
from what I'm doing, to make me smile,
to make my life better in any way he can.
Then he looks and sees the blood
dripping from my arm, staining my clothes,
he turns away, in disgust. Then in an instant,
with the brush of his fingers there gone,
the blood, the cuts, the scars, and the razor.
Gone! He holds me close and whispers
"My darling sister, please don't cry it hurts me
to see you do this to yourself, and all I can ask
is why?" and I whisper back "Because your gone,
no longer here, and no longer near." he whispers
back "I'm never truly far away, in your heart I'll
always stay, you need to know it was my time
to go, and one day forever we'll stay with one another
up above. I love you, remember that always and
if you truly need me..call for me, and you know
I'll be here." Then a quick kiss on the forehead.
With all that done..he was gone. I felt better
of course. My room was now beautiful like
an angel touched it or so it seemed. I smiled,
looked out the window, up at the sky, and whispered
"I love you, Adamangel.
- by XMeowXMeow |
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- | Submitted on 08/06/2009 |
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- Title: My Angel, Adamangel.
- Artist: XMeowXMeow
- Description: This was something I wrote about my baby brother who passed a few years ago.
- Date: 08/06/2009
- Tags: angel adamangel
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Comments (5 Comments)
- this username is invalid - 01/16/2010
- That last comment was cold. It was sweet. I'm really sorry about your brother. That's really hard.
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- iamnotalegend16 - 08/12/2009
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theres no structure, and no emotion.
your just milking the fact that someone would feel bad for you if you wrote this.
thats not the point of free-verse poetry, its to EVOKE YOUR OWN EMOTIONS. not beg people to feel baby for you. i dont care if your baby brother passed, we all suffer loss at one point and if it wasnt your brother it would have been someone else, like maybe THOUSANDS UPON THOUSANDS of people who die worldwide due to oppression or hunger. Your brothers lucky, - Report As Spam
- Failure and Disfunction - 08/07/2009
- Wow...... Amazing.....
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- xXDarkDrowXx - 08/06/2009
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*hugs* Oh my god... that was so sweet... *hugs* I'm so sorry about your lost but this is really good and a great tribute to him.
Pls rate mine:
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