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gunshots
I awoke to a regular greyish morinng. But, there was something different. Birds were chirping. I havn't heard this in 13 years. And just like that, bam, gunshot. The chirping was gone. I got dressed and went to the living room.
"hey, sher." i said as i slowly walked in. Smelling a very apatizing egg.
"Hey, jay!" my wife said, cheery as ever.
"How can you be so happy? everything is terrible..." Our country had been over run by a madman, Josh Dukenheim III.
"well, you have to live life to the fullest." she replied, still cheery.
"we're barlesy living life to the 16th! we can't even take care of Shannon and Daniel!" those were our two beloved kids... were.
"please, jacob, don't mention them. it's not their fault." she was not so cherry now.
"They're fault? did i say that? cause i was reffering to the b***h living his life to the fullest!" our kids, thanks to Dukenheim, were taken away to mine for gold.
"Shh!" she said, tears in her eyes, "the guards will hear you. i dont want to lose my last hope."
"Look sheryl, i know you're sad, but you have every right to be. hell, you can be mad at his lord of damnation for all the neighborhood cares!"
"It's not about the neighborhood, it's about Dukenheim. HE cares. and if were caught, we all die. or worse, one of us dies, and the other is left in pain."
"I would die! as long as Dukenheim does too!!" and just like that a guard came in.
"his heiness would like to see you. and makesure the wife has some more of that egg ready for us when we bring you back. IF we bring you back" the gaurd said, chuckling.
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- Title: death sentence chptr2
- Artist: nasugi
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Description:
chapter 2 of my series. if you havnt noticed the thing at the top middle is the chapter name.
link to chapter one:http://www.gaiaonline.com/arena/writing/fiction/vote/?entry_id=101532695 - Date: 07/09/2009
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Comments (7 Comments)
- nasugi - 07/15/2009
- im almost done with chapter 3
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- SgtFunShineBear - 07/15/2009
- nice story concept but i agree with kate. if your going to explain something with a conversaion, u have to have a natural convertation between those charecters, and then figure out how to explain it withen that boundrie. like it so far keep writing.
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- nasugi - 07/14/2009
- bad spelling. i suck. got an F all the way thorugh 9th - 11th grade
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- Totetsusgff_and_L-chans - 07/14/2009
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I still luv the story it sounds interesting thus far.
^^ when you typed heiness trying to spell Highness meaning royalty or did you type it purposly like that because the guys a madman? *hee hee* (don't worry I'm a bad speller too.) - Report As Spam
- nasugi - 07/14/2009
- um.. thank you?
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- Kate will BRB - 07/12/2009
- Grammar and spelling needs to be looked over and fixed here and there. The dialogue sounds kind of unnatural somehow. It's sort of like he's bitching about how awful Dukenheim is so they audience will know. Which is a normal device, but it's been very clumsily handled here.
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- demistriss - 07/10/2009
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very good! just like the last one.
good for sheryl acting cheery and makin the best of it - Report As Spam