Dont Know what to call it yet.

• Artist: w o w silverr
• Description: This is the story I'm wrighting. Obviously, im not finished yet. This is how far I am. I dont know what else to wright. ://
  This is my first submission of any kind of art on Gaia. Hope you like it.
• Date: 03/18/2009
• Tags: dont know

Opening thingy:
I’ve always wanted to be in a coven. I never really knew much about covens. I just thought it would be cool… People… Ha. I really hated them. That’s probably the reason I wanted to be a vampire so badly. And one day, I got my wish. And it was the best mistake I have ever made.

The begining of Chapter One:
You know, I used to love snow. The way each flake would fall on my face and quickly turn to little drops of water. It used to hide my tears. But now, when it falls on my cold, pale skin, it practically turns to ice. My mother hates the snow. She also hates me. Ha, she always had. Probably because I didn’t go to that creepy church of hers. She said I was the “Devil” child or whatever. Kind of ironic, isn’t it? Although, Vampires are far from being evil. I don’t know where Humans got the idea that we are evil. I know what you’re thinking. “Well, of course Vampires are evil! They eat people!” Well, people eat other animals too. You eat cows and chickens, don’t you? It’s the same damn thing. Drinking a human’s blood does not make us evil. Just as eating a cow does not make you evil. It’s just nature. Besides, we don’t eat innocent people. We only drink the blood from humans who have committed a serious crime.

Comments

[ball pain]

<33
4/5
You didn't tell us the characters name, age, or gender. Other than that it was good. So far there is no point of the story, but you'll probably find a good one.

[Mutandanstan]

you reveal a lot in that puny paragraph, why not layer it and keep the reader guessing? and your 'opening thingy' kind of sucks in that it feels just like some random chick trying to be serious but failing.

[wakuteka -- x --]

umm the vulgarity you used makes your story less serious or less likely to be taken seriously I'd suggest changing the point of view because the current view I feel you're revealing too much. But it has good potential. Sorry if I sound mean...

[w o w silverr]

Thanks :33

[o0Lost_Memory0o]

Its interesting and it has the potential to be a really good story. Good luck 4laugh