-
A tall girl by the age of 15 walked into the chestnut door which lead to a wide open bedroom.Her name was Melinda,which she did not admire in the least.A small golden alarm clock laid at the edge of the vibrant green dresser,soon bursting to life and startling Melinda.She walked over to it and shut it off quickly.She yawned and sat on her bed thinking of her life.It was anything but perfect,her parents just had a divorce and she was forced to stay with her mother who married a man who Melinda hated.Of course no one knew that yet.She would only call him by his name,Brian.It woulkd annoy the hell out of him but thats exactley what Melinda wanted out of him,hatred.Her father lives all the way in Ohio while Melinda,her mother,stepfather,little brother and Brandon live in Colorado .Brandon is a boy that is spending summer break babysitting Melinda's little brother Max....her mother does not feel comfortable with Melinda watching over him though Melinda is only one year younger than Brandon.As you can see Melinda's life as gone from bad to worse in only a couple months.Melinda sighed,the only reason they needed Brandon to babysit all the time was because they went out alot and left Melinda and Max home and since her mother can't pay Brandon she lets him live with them.Melinda stood up and walked out of the door and jumped as the phone rang loudly.Melinda rushed over to it and picked it up listening to the weak voice.
"He...he is coming....h-he is coming fo-for yo-you".Melinda hung up the phone quickly and her heart started to beat heavily."Probably just a prank call".She told herself assuringly.Brandon had her talking and walked up to her."What was probably a prank call"?He asked looking at her,being sure to whisper.Melinda looked at him."Nothing leave me alone".She said as the phone rang again.She turned around and picked it and turned her back on Brandon.Her parents were out again and he was babysitting again.Which was another thing Melinda hated.Melinda turned her attention to the heavy breathing on the phone."You must hide.....he....he.....he will be there......soon".
- by Deadly Dare Doll |
- Fiction
- | Submitted on 02/07/2009 |
- Skip
- Title: Run,Hide...Live
- Artist: Deadly Dare Doll
- Description: Its been a long time and I think its time for another submission!ATTENTION ALL GRAMMER FREAKS:Do not sit there and waste your time critisizing my grammer,everybody makes mistakes I wouldn't mind if you just told me which words I spelt wrong or point out the typo's.Just don't make a huge deal about it.This is the first chapter of this story!
- Date: 02/07/2009
- Tags: infectedthe next chapter
- Report Post
Comments (3 Comments)
- Paramore2789 - 06/12/2009
- That is so good! Give another update please! Read my work!
- Report As Spam
- Melliloquent - 02/09/2009
- This definitely sounds interesting. I can't wait to read what happens next. There were just a few punctuation errors I'd like to point out. First of all, you're supposed to put a space after punctuation marks like commas, periods, and question marks. Also, in quotations, you put the punctuation mark after the second quotation mark. (Ex: "What was probably a prank call?" wink There were also a couple of sentences that should probably be broken up; they were near becoming run-on sentences.
- Report As Spam
- darktwistedmind - 02/08/2009
-
this sounds really good, you should keep going smile
- Report As Spam