Lost and alone

• Artist: KatiaynaTheCrazy
• Description: This is the first page of the story im writing in my english class rate nicely or my imagination will over-throw you!!!!!MUAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!!!!!The story takes place in new-york but the rest goes on to ireland enjoy ^.^
  
• Date: 01/01/2009
• Tags: lost alone

Waiting at the dark bus-stop waiting for the bus it seems it is not coming i crawl into a corner fear spreading around me the shadows seem to wail my name.Cold and alone i look around the bus-stop a mysterious figure is standing near the bus sign.i walk towards the person."Hello"i say.The figure turns around a toothy grin covers his dirty face.Well Well Well what do we have here?Are you lost?No i reply im waiting for the bus.The Bus?The bus hasnt been here since 1941 Ha!!!You must have been tricked.Tricked!!! Darn it!!!!!Woah quite the tongue you have on ye lassie.Sorry i say just a little caught off-guard.Well whould ye like me to give ye a ride home?What home i was moving, this bus was supposed to take me to the airport.Oh well...i can let you stay at my home for a wee bit but it well cost you.I dont care i'll do anything to get out of this blasted place.Anything?He says with a grin.I let ye stay at my home if ye cleans my house every week.Deal!!!i screamed with delight

Comments

[Music_N_Me]

haha, for some reason ths story makes me laugh, in a good way. i like it, few grammar mistakes, but good.

[KatiaynaTheCrazy]

Well ofcourse im working on it more its just a paragraph from my story that im writing Avenged Vampire86

[Puddlezinn Mudd]

Kinda weird. She must've really wanted to leave that bus stop, going with some strange Irish guy work as a maid in his house. What was the guy doing at the bus stop anyway? If he knew the bus hadn't been there in 68 years what was he doing hangin' out there?

[Avenged Vampire86]

First of all, let's try spelling shall we? Secondly, when someone talks, it's a bit confusing if you don't at least have something to symbolize when their phrase ends or begins (ex. " " or ' ' or italics ) And finally, this bit of writing was okay, but you should definately work on it more.