- Any of you who have read my stuff on this story should know that I took it off because the story is finished and I am thinking about getting it published so...yeah. Sorry if you enjoyed it but soon you might see it in print. I'll let you know on this post, okay?
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- Title: Dear Child Chapter one
- Artist: KikuMizu
- Description: Chapter one: The little girl and the mysterious boy
- Date: 12/12/2008
- Tags: dear child chapter
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- Princess_AlisonBlaze - 07/06/2009
- I haven't found anymistakes. Except one: Then she should have no problem with have some time to work on it. Did you mean having some time to work on it? You're really good at describing the characters. You could describe the surroundings a little more I couldn't get a clear picture of what the diner was supposed to look like. (I have a habit of leaving out details like that too so don't feel bad.) I can already see the potential of it being a wonderful story.
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