whats it gonna be in the 2life

• Artist: Ninja sasuke5050
• Description: i just had to squish the title a bit sorry hey your about to see the story OK !?!? this was inspired by my son who can talk now always asking questions
• Date: 11/11/2008
• Tags: whats gonna 2life

full title: whats it gonna be like in my 2nd life? written by: Ninja Sasuke5050 smile ^_^
whats it going to be like in my second life grandfather asked little George question , Well said his grandfather Jacob neutral hmm it will be full of wonders and happiness then George interrupted the story. But What will happen to you asked George will you be there?Yes i will George said grand father Jacob will Nana too?Yes.how about daddy and mommy?Yes.. they will be there. will there be any wars there with his eyes full of tears no oh good i remember when i heard that my very first daddy went to war but your very first daddy will be there too but George didn't respond he was sound asleep as his grand father carried him to bed and kissed him on the head he thought how sad it was to hear him ask that question

Comments

[PoisonousMoonlight]

....no comment really....it's just I read the first few words and I think I died a little.
But listen to the pro's below and you'll be just fine.

[Julia Dream]

Don't use emoticons in stories, learn how to spell, punctuate, capitalize, and use proper grammar, and... Geez, I don't know. Put down the manga and pick up a real book?

[Overworkedandunderpaid]

...
1. Emoticons. Do NOT use them.
2. "" Quotation marks DO use them
3. Paragraphing LEARN it.

But other than that it was horrible! Keep up the bad work, somebody has to make the rest of us feel good.

[BeaniesFTW]

it might be a good story, but how can i tell when i can hardly read it?

[PaperSongs]

You haven't been writing long, have you?