18 deadly nights-ANIME-

• Artist: XMEGANxMxNdxSHANNONxEX
• Description: Giving up the chance to be mortal, Kakai (kuh-kai) starts facing deadly challenges and dangerous aliens called Akron (ak-ron). Even though she's not mortal, she goes to high school.
• Date: 11/03/2008
• Tags: deadly nights

Kakai looked left, then right. She wasn't used to sitting so close to the front with the smarties. It was the middle of a big test and she just wanted the day to be over. Her younger brother was a year 1 class A, probably now in gym while she had to take a test. She sighed seeing her best friend had finished her test. She glanced at the clock and cheered silently.

"Yes, the day is finally over!"

The teacher Mr. Na-chan, announced that the class was over and the paper was due during lunch. Kakai turned to Kaname, her best friend,"His class is always such a killer."
"No, I actually like it." Kaname stated.
"What?! Are you crazy???!!" Thats when Kakai spotted an Akron outside in the school parking lot. Quickly she grabbed her transformation gloss.


As she entered the parking lot, she held hear gloss into the sky and shouted,"GIO FIT GO!" With a wink of an eye she appeared as a crime fighter in a blue fighting shirt and some black skirt. Her blue hair swayed in the ponytale figure.
"Didn't have anything to do so you pick on an innocent school?!" She leaped in the air an delevered a powerful punch. The attack had no affect on the creature what so ever. His laser sliced her arm and she was outnumbered in power. Her life was at stake.


To be continued....

Comments

[r33na1]

I like da story line, but i need to read more to actually figuer out wats goin on, i gotta agree with the chick below me. it's going too fast, not descriptive enough. we have no idea what any of the charecters even look like. plz, plz, plz check out my story and give feedback. I dun't care if u say it's crap but tell me why!

[Shimitana]

It was.... ok?
Much to short, we have no idea what's going on and your writing style is very choppy. And also, she transforms in a parking lot in the middle of school where everyone can see her?
It has potential though, I'll give you that

[Chloie Marie]

Hum, maybe try lengthening the post some? I really don't get what the story is about. It just seems like a Sailor Moon knock-off.

[omg404]

this makes me think of bleach/inuyasha/sailor moon all mixed together

interesting writing style with the anime

[tery123]

your all awesome

[Chaos Muses]

I like your style of writing, you write pretty well but the story itself seems to lack a lot of integrity. It reminds me of Sailor Moon actually... lol It seems too rushed also. Don't be afraid to make longer posts. Detail isn't a bad thing unless there's so much of it that no actual story remains. lol

[aberfetch]

well..it's a little too short for me to catch on whats happening or what the story is about.