- hello an maybey good bye for onece to read this your life is at stake hee hee..... .one cold winter night in a mantion in tokyo japan a young girl named yukiko was home alone an in a death moment to be soon.yukiko is 15 years old an about to witness death straight in the eye. as she read her book she heard a boom an went up stairs to find that a little girl was in the window sill the little girl was named amaya she had on a pure wight kimono. yukiko though she was beutilfull but then then amaya's kimono turned in to a blood red stained kimono an she disapered. then yukiko noticed blood speding on the walls an then there was blood on here hands an all over her. she screamed an then the blood was gone like a bad dream. amaya apered again an said why are you here? yukiko said i live here then amaya siad no i do you are a inturder now leave. yukiko stod there but amaya then had a knife apere in her hands an said LEAVE NOW! yukiko was frightened but not enough becouse she stayed. amaya then apered by her side an then well you know the rest.....yukiko's mother an father came home to notice that yukiko was gone but she was in the basement......dead.....now her goust roams that mantion. but then she ended up mudering her perents because they never cared that yukiko was dead they didnt even look for her at all. so now in musi mantion two little girls goust's roam for ever........a true story...
- by iCandyRainbowz |
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- | Submitted on 10/22/2008 |
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- Title: yukiko
- Artist: iCandyRainbowz
- Description: hee hee yukiko meets a starnge girl named amaya a goust who shows her what life an death really are (note ths is a goust story an also if u piss ur self not my falt its urs u p***y!)
- Date: 10/22/2008
- Tags: goust story
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- P a n d o r a s L u s t - 11/03/2009
- Never have I seen such discrace to writing. I agree with Nerai Kentouken, separate it into paragraphs and learn how to spell then maybe it will not be so bad 0/5 all though I do like the girls names
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- Nerai Kentouken - 10/23/2008
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number 1: improper puncuation
number 2: improber capitalization
number 3: bad spelling
number 4: no quotation marks to signify dialouge
number 5: all of those mistakes just ruined the effect you were shooting for
please try and correct those mistakes, separate this big glob into paragraphs and then maybe i can read it witout my eyes rolling to the back of my head. 1/5...horrid - Report As Spam
- iCandyRainbowz - 10/22/2008
- hee i wrote this hee hee ^ ^
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