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The girls eyes circle the area, slightly widened, her hair wettening in the down pour, wondering where to go next. In her paniced flee, she stumbled falling to her knees. "No, I won't go back. I can't" but her words fell into empty air she was all alone.
"Hey," a new voice enters her world, "Aren't you a little cold?"
"....." Her silence was incomplete as the noise of the world broke in.
"Why don't you just come along with me?" She looked up to see a tall man standing there with a kind smile on his face.
"Where?" Her voice cracked, and she glanced behind him.
"Just to a place warm and dry until we can find your family." The man handed her his umbrella, "At least take this if you are not going to come."
"My family is gone." She said bluntly, and handed back his umbrella and started to turn away,"I don't need your sympathy." She began to run as the terrible memories came flooding back, the tears openly flowing down her face.
"Hey," The man called, "Come back, I'm just trying to help." Fear started to seep into his voice, one she was all to familar with.
A sob escaped her lips. She ran further and further from the man, she would not trust anyone now.
"Darling, what's wrong?" A kind old women asked. "Why don't you come along with me? I have an extra room in my apartment, and it gets lonely with just me." She warbled on, "Please?"
The girl sighed "Okay, I guess"
"Oh, I forgot to ask," The women said happily "Well and tell actually, people call me Tati, you can too, what is your name?" She asked quietly
"Leonara" was her curt reply "call me Lenny.
- Title: a short story
- Artist: katXD
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Description:
just free writen' =]
constructive criticism welcome.
Edit 1: just adding some imagery. - Date: 10/17/2008
- Tags: short story
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Comments (4 Comments)
- Purple Coloured Crayons - 10/20/2009
- you should develop it, it looks interesting and maybe we can find out what happened to the girls family.
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- iifwesh_bunnii - 01/13/2009
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nice story
but you didn't actually tell what happen to the girls family
it could use ALOT of work
but its better than 1 of those stupid depressing emo songs people put on here
5/5 for being way way WAY better than them :]
but slapthefatcat is right, you should develope this ;] - Report As Spam
- katXD - 10/21/2008
- maybe... i'm not really sure. =]. thanks for the offer though!
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- slapthefatcat2 - 10/17/2008
- Are you planning to develop this? I'll edit it if you like.
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