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:tab biggrin oor,... door... the guard said there was a door... there it is! (He sees a door on the right side at the end of the corridor, and slides to a stop in front of it.) Hmm... I didn't keep him alive long enough to tell me what was on the other side... I know! (He reaches into the lining of his scarf and pulls out a large leather-bound book. He flips through the pages until he reaches a page that has seven symbols on it arranged in a circle. He then makes five hand-signs and taps the fifth symbol clockwise from the top. A small violet wisp appears in front of him as he puts the book back in his scarf.)
tab "You called for me?" says the wisp in a girl's voice.
tab Kiri,"Yes, Yori, I need you to take a look at what's beyond this door and report back to me three minutes and tell what you saw."
tab Yori,"As you command..."
tab Kiri,"You should go unnoticed, there are plenty of wisps around here." As he says this a teal-colored wisp floats through the wall, circles around them, and then exits through the wall behind them.
tab Yori nods and proceeds through the door. The first thing she notices is the lack of guards near the door, after observing this she floats down a long corridor with many smaller corridors leading off to unseen parts of the compound, she ignores these and continues on until she reaches a large atrium with an immensely tall structure in the middle. The structure has multiple levels with bridges leading off of it, she also notices that the only natural light is near the very top of the structure, meaning that it was deep underground. She decided that what she had seen so far would be enough to give Kiri a way out, she then returns back the way she came and returns to Kiri.
tab Kiri,"What did you see?"
tab Yori repeats what she saw and then waits for his response as he considers her words.
tab Kiri,"Thank you, that was more than enough for me to devise an escape plan, you may go now."
tab Yori,"Thank you"
:tab sad Yori fades from sight as Kiri stands and reaches for the door handle, his hand grips the handle and he quietly opens the door, the instant he can slip through it he has already sprinted to twenty feet away from the door and continues on down the corridor until reaching the same atrium and structure Yori saw moments ago.) This must be the structure Yori spoke of, hmm... there's something odd about that second level. Not many guards near it either, I'd best take advantage this situation and take a look around. (He jogs up to the structure and looks for the guardrail, he sees a strong point and pulls a cord and claw from within his sleeves. He attaches one end of the cord to his glove and swings the claw up at the rail, it catches and he tugs on the cord twice and it retracts pulling him up onto the level. Just before he reaches the rail he shifts his weight and backflips onto the railing and retracts the last of the cord in a dramatic spin.) I still don't get why these guys kidnapped me, there's nothing I can help them with, oh well, let's see what they've got going on here. ( He steps down from the railing and begins to look around on the platform.) What are these bubbles, are those... people inside them? How strange, huh, what was that? ( he heard a quiet chirp and spun around to see what it could of been, then, upon hearing it again, realizes it's his ring, which was given to him by his adopted sister who said if she was ever unaware that he was nearby or the other way around his would locate her and hers would locate him. He looks at the ring and it makes a small glowing arrow that points him down along the platform, he follows it until he reaches a bubble, he looks inside and sees his sister within.) No...( He then searches frantically around her bubble, and it was rare for him to ever do anything frantically, searching for a release mechanism, he finds it and presses the button, the bubble opens and he gently carries his sister out of it, he places her on the floor and attempts to awaken her.)
tab Kiri,"Shiara? Shiara, it's Kiri, please wake up."
tab Shiara,"Hmm? I don't want to go to school today..."
tab Kiri,"Well you probably won't have to go, considering you've been kidnapped by a group of psychopaths dressed in white."
tab Shiara,"Say what?!" She's wide awake now.
tab Kiri,"Knew that would wake you up, now come on let's get out of here, good thing they left you in your clothes too, otherwise this could been an embarrassing moment."
tab Shiara,"Wait, what's going on?"
tab Kiri," I'll explain later, right now we need to escape and return to the village, ok?"
tab Shiara,"Ok."
They then pull out their grappling hooks and begin climb up to the top of the tower...
To be continued...
- Title: The white lotus part 3
- Artist: Kiri sai
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Description:
This is the continuation of my white lotus journal entries due to the fact that my journal has been acting screwy and won't let me put in another entry. Anyhoo, on with the story.
P.S. the story is told from a third/first person view. Also, if you haven't read my stories I'll try to bring you up to speed in this one as best as I can. It is about my character, Kiri, and if you need an image for reference, look for my entry in the art arena. - Date: 10/09/2008
- Tags: white lotus part
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- Arachnocampa - 11/19/2008
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WARNING!! Constructive Crits!!
I would honestly like it more if you didn't use that style of writing. The naration isn't very consistant, and there are quite a few parts that could have been written better. :c Over all, not bad, but could be better. - Report As Spam