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"It was dark and cold and we didnt know what was going to happen to us, all we knew was that we needed to escape, Far!! no farther!! away from this house this demonic place. I could tell from the way she was shivering that she just couldnt go back to that place or more so a prison, we knew that it would be up soon to track us down and drag us back, all of a sudden she starts shivering and i look over to see her eyes struck with so much fear when i turned i finally figured it out as something flat and metal slammed the side of my head sending me to the ground, it felt like i had been hit by a car, it hurts... im bleeding...i can hear someone shouting... WAIT!!! its her, she's crying and shouting my name as i look up i see her tearing face, all of a sudden i see lights..is this what it is like to leave this world"
"WAIT dont go please i need you,"
"Comes a voice and looking up im surrounded by faces and lights, among them she stares."
"Were free please dont leave me when we finally escaped."
- by romancer88 |
- Fiction
- | Submitted on 10/04/2008 |
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- Title: escape
- Artist: romancer88
- Description: a description well you will have to see for yourselves
- Date: 10/04/2008
- Tags: kickin around bush
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Comments (5 Comments)
- white horse93 - 12/31/2008
- lol, we have the same hair, asg9575... and shirt...creeeepy......stalker, or what?! heh, jk!!
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- white horse93 - 12/31/2008
- well, your grmmar was terrible, but it has a great clff hanger ending, so I'd say 4-star. plus, I like how you left us waiting to see if he stays with her... smile
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- asg7595 - 10/04/2008
- hmmm i loved it but if ur hair was better id give a five starr lol im jk 5 star 4 u!
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- Fireraid-X - 10/04/2008
- lol dude, u don't comment ur own story, thats for other people, it just makes it corny if u do...anyway i thought that it was relly relly cute!! i especially loved the last line ^^ that was the cutest part...but i wanted to see more...like what happens to the guy...but sumtimes it's good to leave the reader like that....in this case though...it's bitter-sweet.
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- romancer88 - 10/04/2008
- i hope everyone enjoys
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