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Laughter. Blond hair. Smiles. Loud voices. Bawdy jokes. Brown eyes. Forgetting yesterday. A sense of nostalgia, of a new experience. Of warmth. Acceptance. Paranoia. Hesitation. More? An unhealthy escape. Why not? Who cared? No one. He did. No one.
Intangible. Unintelligible. Insensible. Indescribable.
"It won't hurt."
That's all it had started out with. So he had gone along with it. It wouldn't, after all. He had drunk liquor before. It wasn't poisoned; he had made sure. No one was dying yet, either. And now...
Just what was going on?
Tugging. A wall. Thick gloves. Pushing. The floor. Warmth.
"That's not fair." The first thing that came to his mind. "I'm drunk."
More laughter. The smell of alcohol. Cold air on exposed skin. Pulling. His shirt.
"So what? So am I."
Hot breath on his face. Chapped lips. Hesitation.
He opened his mouth only slightly, and that was his gravest mistake.
Invasion.
Tongue.
Saliva.
Hands.
Too close.
He shoved her off and walked away.
Confusion.
- by Pyrrhic Victini |
- Fiction
- | Submitted on 04/05/2009 |
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- Title: Invasion
- Artist: Pyrrhic Victini
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Description:
I tried a different style that's more stream of consciousness with this. The characters belong to Saraii in White (who gave me permission to submit this short one-shot.) I tried to express the mood & emotions of the character that you're seeing through (being Naro) through the short phrases/single word sentences, which fit best due to his being drunk.
It all started out with this doodle made in boredom: http://x-aka-x.deviantart.com/art/No-Fair-c-109607552
Enjoy! - Date: 04/05/2009
- Tags: invasion taymen naro saraiiinwhite oneshot
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Comments (5 Comments)
- xXDarkDrowXx - 08/09/2009
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Wow! This is intense and very good! 5/5!
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- Uberninja213 - 07/22/2009
- wow intense
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- Yagami Vampire - 05/30/2009
- not bad 5/5 with a little -
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- XxR A W x M E L O D YxX - 05/08/2009
- wow 5/5 ur a wonderful writer! smile that was very emotional and i like how he resisted.
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- xxE a r l G r a y - 04/05/2009
- I like the style. It's very emotional and displays the amount of confusion going on in the main character's head. Bravo.
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